Wednesday, 3 October 2012

Pleminary exercise script- The Coffee Shop

The Coffee Shop


JESSIE enters the coffee shop to meet Florence.

JESSIE
Hey.
 
FLORENCE
Hi, it’s been a long time since we’ve hanged out.

JESSIE
(SHRUGS AND GOES TO SIT DOWN OPPOSITE FLORENCE AT THE TABLE)
Since you and Rob got together we stopped hanging out.
 
FLORENCE
Listen Jessie I’m sorry about how I’ve handled everything. I hope we can be like we were before all of that.
 
JESSIE
That’s only because you and Rob broke up!
 
Using the 180 degree rule, we follow behind Jessie’s shoulder

(WAITRESS ENTERS THE SCENE AND WALKS UP TO THEIR TABLE)
 
We immediately look up at the waitress. A high shot is used so we see all characters present in the scene.
 
WAITRESS
(LOOKS AT FLORENCE AND SMILES)
What can I get you?
 
FLORENCE
I’ll have a hot chocolate please.

We follow behind Jessie’s shoulder.
 
JESSIE
(STARES AT FLORENCE FOR SEVERAL SECONDS)
 
FLORENCE
Jessie?
 
JESSIE
I can’t do this, you get a boyfriend and pretend we never met and now you’re no longer together you want to be friends.
 
WAITRESS
I’ll come back in a few minutes.

JESSIE
No, I’ll have a coffee to go please.

WAITRESS
(Shakes her head, smiles and walks away in a rush)

Camera is positioned in the middle of Jessie and Florence for a full shot.
 
FLORENCE
Your blowing this way out of proportion! I know it’s my fault.

JESSIE
Damn right it is!
 
FLORENCE
Jessie please
(HESITATES)
You’re my best friend
 
JESSIE
Things have changed.
 
FLORENCE
(LOOKS DOWN AT HER LAP)
 
We close up on Florence’s face while Jessie is talking in the background.
 
JESSIE
I’m moving to Canada, my mum has been offered a job over there. I’m leaving in 2 weeks.

Camera looks at Jessie from behind Florence’s shoulder.
 
FLORENCE
(HEAD SHOOTS UP)
What?! You only tell me now!
 
JESSIE
You’re lucky I even told you. A friend is expected to be there for their friends. You weren’t there.
 
FLORENCE
You hate me, I can’t believe this!
 
JESSIE
I could never hate you Florence. But we can’t pretend the last few months didn’t happen.
 
We centre back to the middle of the table with a view of each character.

WAITRESS
Here’s your coffee to go.
 
JESSIE
(RUMMAGES THROUGH HER PURSE AND HANDS THE WAITRESS THE MONEY)
Thank you.
 
WAITRESS
You’re welcome.
(SMILES AND WALKS AWAY)

*PHONE RINGS*
We close up of Florence’s phone screen on the table. Caller I.D reads ‘Rob’.
 
FLORENCE
(LOOKS UP AT PHONE AND LOOKS AT JESSIE WATCHING HER PHONE)
 
JESSIE
(FLINGS HANDS IN THE AIR AND STANDS UP)
Go run after Rob like you always do! I’m gone. Bye Florence.

We follow Jessie to the shop door and pan while she’s running for a bus. Camera then turns around to see Florence looking out the window.
END OF SCENE
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1 comment:

  1. Www. Wow. A lot of work and thought here and I think an effort to put it into script format which has been sadly frustrated by blogger.

    Ebi. I asked for no more that 5 lines of dialogue, the reason being, I want you t get used to working with restrictions and in the end with the absolute minimum amount of dialogue needed for your opening scene.

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